Dragon-Themed Writing Contest Saves My Bacon

My bacon was cooked . . . and then it got saved.  

You see, Monday is my day to put a short story up at Legends Undying, and I  . . . well, let me just copy what I wrote over there . . . 

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9:45pm, Sunday evening . . . a cold bead of sweat runs down the side of my face, gathering speed as it makes it over the cheek bone, and finally launches itself to land on the (figurative) blank sheet of paper.  The paper where the latest installment of my angels short story is supposed to be . . . and is not.

Damn it!  Again, with the being late, with having life interfere with art.  I still have to shower, and try to get at least four hours sleep before heading to work on Monday morning.

. . . and I have nothing!  All I can think of is dragons, not angels.  Because, you see, I want to enter the dragon story contest.

Hey!!  I could whip up a dragon short story, and use it as my Monday contribution!  The idea hits me like a ton of bricks, and it frees up my creative juices.   

. . . I get some paper towels, sop up them juices, and wring them out over the keyboard . . . and 45 minutes later I have my entry.

It will be Entry #6, and I have a good feeling about it . . . safely nestled between two prime numbers, it looks good.  The doubt and feelings of inadequacy will come later, after I read the other entries, but for now, I am happy.  Besides, Melisa likes it, and that is all that matters.

So, here we go; entry number six . . . 

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Unspoiled Offering

By E. J. D’Alise (Disperser)
Copyright February 2013

“But why us?  Why our daughter?!?”  Ernin looked at Saven, daring to see hope, but finding none.

“You know the agreement . . . they guarantee our safety, and in return, when their leader’s eldest comes of age, they feed on the youngest of our unspoiled daughters.”  Saven could hardly get the words out.  Just thinking about it hurt beyond belief, but voicing the fact made the pain unbearable.  

He looked at the parchment from the elders, the words seemingly hovering above the paper . . . he knew it was an optical illusion due to the red letters on the blue background, the colors of official edicts.

“Where is she now?” Saven asked.

“She is with Serten, out by the cliffs.”  Ernin sat as she spoke, an air of resignation settling upon her.  “Oh . . . Serten . . . he will not let her go without a fight!”  

The words carried renewed hope, but their flame was but a flicker.  Ernin knew the elders would keep Serten from interfering.  

“I will go talk to them.”  As he spoke, Saven headed to the cliffs.

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“The sky is magnificent!”

Serten was content to just look at Evare, letting her infectious enthusiasm and good mood wash over him.  They had grown up together, and had been inseparable since they had come of age.  As soon as he could settle on his own plot of land, he would ask her to be his mate.

Evare turned to him, her smile touching her eyes, and brightening the very air around them.  She knew of his plans, and thought about their future every moment not spent learning, or doing chores.  As she lost herself in his green eyes, she saw a change in his demeanor, saw him stiffen, and watched him lose his smile.

She turned, and saw her father coming toward them . . . as he neared, she knew something was wrong, and she feared something had happened to her mother.

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Saven, Ernin, and Evare stood facing the circle of elders.  Imposing they were, but they echoed the family’s pain.  Most of the clan was in attendance.  Serten stood well back, his dark visage made more ominous by the shadows cast by the Home Tree.  Two elders stood at his sides.  It was obvious they were not there to comfort him.

“Per the agreement at the end of The Great War, Evare, youngest of the maidens, is to be offered to the Leader’s oldest son.  This sacrifice symbolizes our resolve to abide to The Truce agreed upon by our ancestors, and in exchange grants us the right to inhabit these lands.  So it is written, so it is done.”

The eldest of the elders finished speaking, and nodded to the two who would deliver her to the sacrificial altar.

Evare offered no resistance as they gently led her from the group.  No one spoke.

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Standing on the altar, she looked down at the gathering.  Her own kind were forbidden from this place, and she found no compassion, and no pity, in the faces of those gathered for the occasion, the Leader and his oldest son among them.  Hideous creatures, they bore themselves with little grace, and shuffled along as if on the verge of toppling.  

She resolved to face her end with dignity and grace.  She glanced at the butchering pit . . . she had been told she would be mercifully killed before being dismembered.  Closing her eyes, she could not cast the image of her body being torn asunder from her mind.  

She opened her eyes, and watched as the Leader urged his oldest to start the feast.  He looked weak . . . she hoped he would be strong enough to finish her in one blow.  Despite her resolve, when he jumped up on the altar, she took a half step back.  Then she caught herself, resumed her station, and stood tall even as he neared.  She closed her eyes.

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She waited for the blow, but what she felt was a rush of warm air, and the comforting heat of fire.

She opened her eyes.  Serten was hovering above the altar, a determined look in his eyes.  Even as his powerful wings held him in place, his tail impaled the Leader’s eldest, and without breaking station, he belched a stream of hot liquid that vaporized the Leader and his guards.

As he settled next to Evare, the rest of the humans broke rank, and ran.  Folding his wings around her, he looked into her eyes.  “Are you alright?”  His voice was strong, confident . . . capable.

“Yes, but . . . won’t this mean war?”

Serten looked at the humans running away.  “For too long we have suffered as no more than pack animals for these humans, even as they grew soft and indolent.  We had won the right to be treated as equal, and now it seems we will have to fight for that right once again.”  

He looked over his shoulder.  Evare followed his gaze, and saw a swarm of dragons of the South clan heading toward her Home Tree.  She had heard stories about The Gathering, and could hardly believe she was alive to witness it.  

“Join me,” Serten’s wings unfolded, and with one powerful beat, they lifted him into the air, “as we fight to regain our rightful place in the skies above this land.”

Evare briefly worried about the coming conflict . . . then smiled, and she lifted to join Serten.  This was, after all, what dragons were born to do.

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As usual, as I re-read something the day after, I can see places where I could improve a few things, add a few words, remove a few others.  For instance, as Evare is on the altar, I considered adding a sentence regarding the Leader’s oldest son barring his teeth, and Evare not knowing if the creature was smiling or snarling.  

All part of the initial mis-direction toward the eventual overturning of the reader’s expectations.

But, ultimately, I decided to leave it as is.  I thought it was a decent effort for just shy of an hour of writing (including editing).  I would love to hear reactions to the story, but it’s not necessary.

I hope it was a good read.  If it was, tell everyone.  If it wasn’t . . . remember, no need to get all hot and bothered over it.

Crying

Crying

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9 Responses to Dragon-Themed Writing Contest Saves My Bacon

  1. margie says:

    this is really good emilio. you seem to put yourself in those stories and that is good. that is what makes a good writting.

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  2. AnnMarie says:

    Oh, my, but this is an entertaining little story! And a great surprise at the end that they’re dragons . . . even though you did mention that it would be about them. Anyway, I really enjoyed it. I followed the link “dragon story contest” and “like-d” it there but I did not read any of the others. Hope your story impresses them as much as it did me. Good luck!

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    • disperser says:

      Thanks . . . Because of the awards (most magical, scariest, and most innovative), I don’t think it will do well as it does not fit on any of those categories. But I liked writing it, and that is worth a lot to me.

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      • AnnMarie says:

        And all the more to me. They should have a category “best feeling” . . . but somehow I don’t think that would fly . . . hey, that’s funny and I didn’t even try to be . . . um, I guess “they” can tell we’re related . . .

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  5. love your gathering of dragons!! and how you reveal them at the end- a nice twist!

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